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Chapter 39 of Adamant Region: for the readers?

Journal Entry: Wed May 27, 2009, 2:58 PM
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This journal is for my readers, feel free to read or not, but hopefully only if you've read that far.

Obviously, chapter 39 isn't out yet, I'm really questioning my ability to finish it. More than half of it was finished within a week of ch. 38, but then my second semester of College kicked in and, well, it threw my story off course. There's that, and I'm not alone at night anymore (I talk to Amber instead, and gosh she's worth every second).

It is my summer time, and once I get my head together and practice writing again, I'm sure I can finish it. However, I am at a loss of what to do... I have a story plot of key events that will happen for my main characters (Sparkles and her psychic ability developing, Logan and his attachment to other pokémon, etc.) throughout the whole story from literally since I started writing till the end at the Pokémon league (come the year I actually get that far), but lately can't think of much of what I want to happen in between events, or rather, I'm lacking story to continue my story! Really though, a lot of what I want to happen can't happen yet, not enough time and scenarios have passed for these events to be as effective as I want them to be.

So, here's where my readers come in. I don't know if many writers do this, but I want to see if I can incorporate anything that my readers want in the story. It is the pokémon world after all, I'm sure I can have much more happen then walk through a random city as generic as the last and fight the gym leader (well, that isn't exactly what has happened, but I fear that). In that, either on this journal itself or in notes, I want input (if you're willing to give it to me). If you have ideas of things that can happen in the city and in the traveling between cities, I'm willing to hear them and see what I can do. Credit for ideas will be put into the description of the chapter.

Note, a few details though: I have already decided what happens with the fight against the gym leader, whether or not the other characters interact with him or not. So, in case anyone thought a new character (yours probably) can be added as a traveling partner, that's not going to happen; seriously, my main character is not Ash, he doesn't travel with a group of three region to region, he barely lets anyone stay with him between one town and the next. I think that's all I wanted to say, basically that I want to continue my story but I need a push.

Oh, and yes! Yesterday while I was in Jury Duty (yeah, that was fun... not really), I was able to read over the printed version of a few of my first chapters. I'm thinking of going back and rewriting them a bit. Not change the story or anything, but maybe change the description of what happens and see if it can be updated because, well, I know my later chapters are better written with the practice, but I don't think my beginning chapters are strong enough to get people through to the next. Is that worth shooting for too?

  • Listening to: Endless Possibilties
  • Reading: Over my first few chapters
  • Drinking: Water

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:iconcooldude104:
Will you ever continue those Onsley Comics? I'm also looking forward to adamant.
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Logan stumbles upon an underground fighting ring where either a. the pokemon fight to the death, or b. humans like Logan fight unwillingly.
Depending on either, he can save the pokemon/people, and maybe show off a few of his own moves too. 83

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Actually, speaking of you, I haven't talked to you in so long I can't remember how you are. Doesn't help considering you're hanging with my character in the next couple of chapters.

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Maybe some person steals his hat, and he has to run around looking for it, while hiding those fox ears? (since I think I heard you say something somewhere that he doesnt have normal ears anymore and so always has his fox ears out, but hidden under hat.

Also maybe he falls off a building or out of a tree and gets hurt and someone who knows he has wings (proffessor whats-his-name?) gets all mad at him for not using them (because people were nearby) Also an alternate version of that is maybe he DOES use his wings to land safely, somebody sees, and that person follows him around for the whole chapter, convinced hes an angel, until at the end of the chapter a relative forces the person to forget about it and leave Logan alone XD

And another idea is Logan gets involved somehow into a shady pokemon daycare organization, where pokemon people leave for daycare mysteriously "run away", and then sparkles disappears right infront of him (spoiler, trapdooors) and he has to find out where the pokemon are being taken so he can get back sparkles. He then finds the pokemon are sent to battle in those battle things where unstead of using your own, you choose pokemon from a list of pokemon owned by the battle thing (I think this appears in ruby/sapphire/emerald, in a tent like thing in one of the coastal cities)

One more idea is a collector of shiny pokemon harasses logan for the course of the chapter, tryin to get him to donate Nova. In the end of the chapter, the collector hires band of whatever chaos (forget the name of the criminal organization you use) grunts to beat Logan and steal nova.

Super long post, but I do tend to have plenty of ideas, even though quality of said ideas may be questionable.

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Well, I have a few thoughts. I hope they help. ^_^

Maybe the Eon trainer (with Espeon and Flareon) from the first few chapters has managed to track Logan down, still intent on obtaining Sparkles, but sees Logan's tail/ears. After the initial 'scare', he takes more care in observing the young trainer. Then he strikes.

That's the first, since I thought it'd be interesting to see happen. If that doesn't help, I could try posting another.

Best of luck. *huggles* ^_^

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i come in outta nowhere & crash the gym place? :iconohjoyplz:

id love to see more random colored pokemon! (hell i want one). black aipoms, yellow riolus, white charmanders! shit i want one! *kinda has some already but STILL*

o3o more randomness then! D:

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I really don't know, I rather just end the Olney Series, it's unoriginal and not as amusing as it used to be.

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First idea: having someone steal the hat is a classic, I've already planned it for one of the in between city journeys, but not the way you're saying it. He does have normal ears when he isn't switching between parts of his form, but I'm sure I can change it up somehow.

Second idea: Funny, falling from a building and having to use his wings was something I'm planning for one of the upcoming chapters (well, he doesn't fall by accident, he's trying to catch something). I didn't think of the idea of someone seeing him and thinking he's an angel though, I might just use that, that could work.

A shady daycare, huh? I've already thought of visiting a daycare on the way to one city (I was going to introduce Sparks as the pichu in it), but a shady daycare sounds even better. I'll have to write these down in my outline, I know I can put together fun stuff for this.

Shiny collector, the people James told him to watch out for, good idea, I'll try to think of a character that will do that later on (too early for proper kidnapping).

Thanks for the ideas, have any more you'd like to see, I'm glad to hear them. Eventually I'll get back into the writing mode, so it will be nice to see what be written.

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I haven't forgotten about Travis just yet (the eon trainer, chapter four), but there's still a matter of placement. Remember, Travis was in one of the beginning cities, and even if he did manage to follow Logan, he was moved to the other side of the region from the Tainted Crystal Mountains (that's why Trey hasn't made a recent appearance, he's on the other side of the region...). It'll be a crest or two ahead, but he will meet again (and who knows on what terms!).

Have any other ideas? I have a lot in store for future chapters, but I'm just not at the points in the region to use them yet (have to be at the right place for it to happen, but I don't want to skip through weeks of his life just to get to them).

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